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 <h3 id="a-prototype-for-interactive-childrens-literature">A Prototype
 for Interactive Children’s Literature</h3>
 <p>Wink is a prototype for an interactive picture book platform. This
-platform aims to make reading into a mindfull and thought provoking
+platform aims to make reading into a mindful and thought-provoking
 process by using interactive and playful elements, multiple stories
-within one narrative and sound elements. Especially today where
+within one narrative and sound elements. Especially today when
-consumerism and low attention span is a rising issue especially amongst
+consumerism and low attention span are rising issues, especially amongst
 young readers, this was an important task to tackle. The thought of Wink
 emerged to find a more sustainable and creative way of reading for
 elementary school children.</p>
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 <figcaption aria-hidden="true">“From the event at Leeszaal West. Some of
 the results of knotting text”</figcaption>
 </figure>
-<p>Working as a children’s literature editor for years, I came to a
+<p>Working as a children’s literature editor for years, I came to a realisation that picture books were turning into another object that kids read and consume on a daily basis. At least this is what I observed in Turkey. Teachers and parents were finding it difficult to find new books constantly or were tired of rereading the same book. As a young person in the publishing sector, I believe there should be as many options
-realisation that picture books were turning into another object that
+for children as there are for adults; such as ebooks, audiobooks etc. But
-kids read and consume on daily basis. At least this is what I observed
+moreover, a “book” that can be redefined, reread or interacted with.
-in Turkey. Teachers and parents were finding it difficult to find new
+So I revisited an old story I wrote, translated it to English and named it
-books constantly or were tired of rereading the same book. As a young
-person in the publishing sector, I believe there should be more options
-for children as there is for adults; such as ebooks, audiobooks etc. But
-moreover a “book” that can be redefined, reread or be interacted with.
-So I revisited an old story I wrote, translated to English and named it,
 “Bee Within”.</p>
 <figure>
 <img src="../irmak/print3.jpg"
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 interactivity options and workshops with children and adults, around
 reading and doing various exercises on Bee Within, I improved the story
 to be a more playful and interactive one which can be re-read, re-played
-and eventually re-formed non digitally to be reachable for all
+and eventually re-formed non digitally to be reachable to all
 children.</p>
 <figure>
 <img src="../irmak/twine.png"
@@ -125,8 +120,8 @@ alt="“Click game story of the Queen Bee that is reachable within Maya’s main
 <figcaption aria-hidden="true">“Click game story of the Queen Bee that
 is reachable within Maya’s main storyline.”</figcaption>
 </figure>
-<p>Here is some more documentation from the beggining of this journey
+<p>Here is some documentation from the beginning of this journey
-towards making accesible interactive narratives…</p>
+towards making accessible interactive narratives…</p>
 <figure>
 <img src="../irmak/animationseq.png"
 alt="“A small sequence of onclick animation for Bee Within”" />