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     - July 2056, the Nim population has hit a point of stagnation.
     - My name is 1, I am a proud, yet worn out, nimizen of what is known as the Nimation for now more than five centuries.
     - Since our formation in Europe in 1532 our population has not decreased nor increased.
-    - We remain a steady and horrifyingly tiresome sixteen individuals,
+    - We remain a steady and horrifyingly tiresome sixteen individuals, "stuck in what is now a seriously embarrassing hierarchical structure: the pyramid."
-    - "stuck in what is now a seriously embarrassing hierarchical structure: the pyramid."
 
     - Our society used to be organised in the following structure
     - 1 1 2 3 1 2 3 4 5 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 #TODO: replace with image?
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     - (ii) Nimizens are only able to communicate with their immediate neighbour, i.e 1 and 7 can never be in touch
     - (iii) Only Nim’s of an identical position within our pyramid structure can navigate outside of the pyramid together at once
 
-    - As you may imagine, the referral to multiple 1s, 2s, 3s, 4s and 5s was quite unsettling,
+    - As you may imagine, the referral to multiple 1s, 2s, 3s, 4s and 5s was quite unsettling, raised jealousies and could get outsiders confused.
-    - raised jealousies and could get outsiders confused.
     - The Nim Revolution, 1904, marked a turn in our history as new names were assigned to each nimizen
     - 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 11, 12, 13, 14, 15, 16.
 
     - 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 #TODO: replace with image?
 
-    - Embracing each nimizen as individuals,
+    - Embracing each nimizen as individuals, through distinct names and physical features became the norm.
-    - through distinct names and physical features became the norm.
+    - Our diversity had finally become the trope for a fair representation of the self within a co-dependent society.
-    - Our diversity had finally become the trope for
+    - The following year, 1905 the L-group composed of 3, 7, 13, 14, 15, 16 and myself wanted to go even further and re-considered our architectural ideologies.
-    - a fair representation of the self within a co-dependent society.
-    - The following year, 1905
-    - the L-group composed of 3, 7, 13, 14, 15, 16 and myself
-    - wanted to go even further and re-considered our architectural ideologies.
 
-    - We wanted to implement a new set of rules
+    - We wanted to implement a new set of rules:
 
     - (i) Nimation is opened to groups as much as individuals. It will no longer be a couple only experience.
     - (ii) A nimizen should be able to engage with any other nimizens and not only their immediate neighbour
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     - (vi) One’s fate shouldn’t be set in stone, one should have agency as to the path one chooses
     - (vii) Nimation should be open to the growth of its nimizens as well as its annihilation, retirement of its nimizens or replacement of its nimizens
 
-    - Unable to convince the others of the necessity of the institution’s rewriting
+    - Unable to convince the others of the necessity of the institution’s rewriting our structure remained the same.
-    - our structure remained the same.
 
     - "1: Psst."
     - "Silence."