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 title: Exquisite Branch
 credits: Kamo
 contents:
-    - The exquisite corpse is a multiplayer game invented by the surrealists in which the participants compose a drawing or a story together.
+    - The exquisite corpse is a multiplayer game invented by the surrealists. The aim of the game is to compose a drawing or a story together.
-    - Traditionally the game is played on a long sheet of paper, and each player draws a part.
+    - Traditionally the game is played on a long sheet of paper and each player draws a part.
-    - The process requires to hide the drawing to the next person, but leaving them some hints to continue.
+    - The next player should not see the drawing of the previous one. They only have a small hint from which to continue.
-    - The following fellow keeps draw from there and so on.
+    - This goes on and on: the next player draws from the hint of the previous one. 
-    - The result is a weird linear narrative, in which the transition between authors are at the same time smooth and abrupt.
+    - The result is a weird linear narrative. The transition between authors is both smooth and abrupt.
 
     - The Exquisite Branch is an online take on the game.
     - It questions concepts such as authorship and collaboration in the light of the digital age.
-    - The original version is constrained to the single piece of paper and is doomed to be linear.
+    - The original version is constrained to a single piece of paper and is destined to be linear.
-    - Here we can imagine our drawings forking and branching and go in different directions.
+    - Let’s imagine our drawings forking and branching. Going in different directions.
-    - The way in which XB works recall the flows of a protocol like Git.
+    - The way in which Exquisite Branch works recall the flows of a protocol just like Git.
 
-    - Instruction
+    - Instructions
-    - There are 2 ways to get to the XB
+    - There are 2 ways to get to the Exquisite Branch:
-    - either you navigate to https://hub.xpub.nl/soupboat/xquisite #TODO: QRCODE
+    - You either navigate to https://hub.xpub.nl/soupboat/xquisite #TODO: QRCODE
-    - or you receive a link from someone pointing to a specific branch
+    - Or you receive a link from someone pointing to a specific branch.
-    - you can either start a new drawing, continue from the last contribuition or view all the branches
+    - You can either start a new drawing, continue from the last contribution or view all the branches. 
-    - then it's time to scribble something or paint a masterpiece
+    - Then it's time to scribble something or paint a masterpiece.
-    - and when you are done you can submit the drawing
+    - When you are done, you can submit the drawing.
-    - you will receive a new link to share with others.
+    - You will receive a new link to share with others.
     - They will continue from your drawing, so leave some hints!
 
-    - If you pass the link to just one person the xquisite drawing will continue linearly
+    - If you pass the link to just one person, the xquisite drawing will continue linearly.
-    - but if you pass it to several people it will branch
+    - But if you pass it to several people, it will branch.
-    - resulting in multiple version with a common starting point.
+    - It will have multiple versions with a common starting point.
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