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backplaces/hermit/script.js

@@ -50,12 +50,12 @@ function openLetter() {
         <p id="letterContents">
             Hi. I made you this website. 
             <br><br>
-            Hermit Fantasy is a short story about a bot who wants to be a hermit. Inspired by an email response from a survey I conducted about receiving emotional support on the Internet, this story explores the contradiction of being online while wanting to disconnect. As an act it's a series of letters, click by click.
+            Hermit Fantasy is a short story about a bot and a hermit. Inspired by an email response from a survey I conducted about receiving emotional support on the Internet, this story explores the contradiction of being online while wanting to disconnect. As an act it's a series of letters, click by click.
             <br><br>
             ada
             <br><br>
             p.s.
-            <br><br>
+                <br>
             If you see yourself, what you have told me or posted online reflected too closely for comfort do not hesitate to reach out to me at 0backplaces@gmail.com
         </p>
     `);

backplaces/js/script.js

@@ -30,8 +30,7 @@ function openLetter() {
     <br>
     ada
     <br><br>
-    p.s.
+    p.s.<br>
-    <br><br>
     If you see yourself, what you have told me or posted online reflected too closely for comfort do not hesitate to reach out to me at 0backplaces@gmail.com
   </p>
   `);

backplaces/pie/script.js

@@ -5,14 +5,15 @@ function openLetter() {
     <br><br>
     Cake Intimacies is a performance that took a year to bring together. It is a small selection of stories people told me and I held to memory and rewrote here. The stories come from two performances I hosted. 
     <br> <br>
-    First, I asked participants to eat cake, sitting facing or away from each other and sharing their stories about cake and the Internet. The second performance was hosted at the Art Meets Radical Openness Festival, as part of the Turning of the Internet workshop. For this performance, I predicted participants' future lives on the Internet using felted archetypes and received stories from their Internet past in return. 
+    In the first, I asked participants to eat cake, sitting facing or away from each other and share stories about cake and the Internet. 
+    In the second performance, hosted at the Art Meets Radical Openness Festival, I predicted participants' future lives on the Internet using felted archetypes and received stories from their Internet past in return. 
     <br> <br>
     Now the stories are here, each of them a cake with a filling that tells a story, merging the bodily with the digital and making a mess of it all
     <br><br>
     ada
     <br><br>
     p.s.
-    <br><br>
+    <br>
     If you see yourself, what you have told me or posted online reflected too closely for comfort do not hesitate to reach out to me at 0backplaces@gmail.com`)
     $('.letterBox').toggle()
   }

backplaces/sunrise/sunrise.js

@@ -72,11 +72,11 @@ function openLetter() {
     $('#letterContents').html(` <p id = "letterContents">
     Hi. I made you this website. 
     <br><br>
-    It’s called Solar Sibiling and and it's an homage to the Tumblr practice of web weaving, where collages of media excerpts are curated around a common theme. This project reimagines that by transforming user comments from TikTok videos about sibling relationships into poems. These poems capture a collective sense of despair and comfort in shared experiences. "Solar Sibling" celebrates the vulnerabilities nurtured in online communities and invites anonymous contributions reflecting the complexities of sibling relationships.
+    It’s called Solar Sibiling and it's a project that reimagines the Tumblr practice of web weaving pieces of media into collages. I did this by transforming user comments from TikTok videos about sibling relationships into poems. To do this I have taken the feeling behing the comment, found where it met my own and used our shared words. These poems capture a collective sense of despair and comfort in shared experiences. Solar Sibling is both a celebration of the vulnerabilities nurtured in online communities and an invitation to share anonymous contributions on the complexities of sibling relationships via comment form. Once you have whispered your sibiling feelings to me, they will stay with me and will never be used nor shared. It is just to make us both feel less singular.  
     <br><br>
     ada
     <br><br>
-    p.s.<br><br>
+    p.s.<br>
     If you see yourself, what you have told me or posted online reflected too closely for comfort do not hesitate to reach out to me at 0backplaces@gmail.com`)
     $('.letterBox').toggle()
   }