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 title: Exquisite Branch
 credits: Kamo
 contents:
-    - The exquisite corpse is a multiplayer game invented by the surrealists. Its aim is to compose a drawing or a story together.
+    - The exquisite corpse is a multiplayer game invented by the surrealists. Its aim is to compose a collective drawing or a story.
     - Traditionally the game is played on a long sheet of paper and each player draws a part.
     - The next player should not see the drawing of the previous one. They only have a small hint from which to continue.
-    - This goes on and on: the next player draws from the hint of the previous one. 
+    - This goes on and on: the next player draws from the hint of the previous one without seeing the whole image. 
     - The result is a weird linear narrative. The transition between authors is both smooth and abrupt.
 
     - The Exquisite Branch is an online take on the game.
     - It questions concepts such as authorship and collaboration in the light of the digital age.
     - The original version is constrained to a single piece of paper and is destined to be linear.
     - Let’s imagine our drawings forking and branching. Going in different directions.
-    - The way in which Exquisite Branch works recall the flows of a protocol just like Git.
+    - The way in which Exquisite Branch works recalls the flow of a version control system just like Git.
 
     - Instructions
-    - There are 2 ways to get to the Exquisite Branch:
-    - You either navigate to https://hub.xpub.nl/soupboat/xquisite #TODO: QRCODE
+    - "There are 2 ways to get to the Exquisite Branch:"
+    - "You either navigate to https://hub.xpub.nl/soupboat/xquisite #TODO: QRCODE"
     - Or you receive a link from someone pointing to a specific branch.
     - You can either start a new drawing, continue from the last contribution or view all the branches. 
     - Then it's time to scribble something or paint a masterpiece.